Talk:General Ironeye/@comment-70.88.69.82-20150119162208

Ok I read up on Iron Eye and some of his forms and his personality. Personality: nailed it. I like how he's.not just a stereotype hot head. It's hard to craft an interesting character, but I'm fairly interested in Iron Eye. However I'm just going to say he is way to over powered. He needs to have some kind of weakness. You want to make it so he loses some fights and maybe he fails to save someone and it makes him more crazy. The forms: These were very far-fetched. I recommend you explain how he transforms and make each transformation slightly more powerful. No offense but having him transform from a mechanical Dragon to a normal Dragon, to a Bear makes no sense to me. I would get rid oh his bear ability unless you can explain an matic artificat he has that turns him into a powerful bear spirit or something like that. The ghost form is also very random. The forms sound cool on paper, but if you try to implement them in their current state it'll make the story seem a little silly. You don't see Goku transform from a mechanical dragon to a ghost, is all I'm saying. Also it would be very cool if each of his powers had a drawback; something that hurts him so he has to use them sparingly. For instance maybe his bear form, makes him weaker when he transforms back go human form. Or maybe it makes him more inhuman and he can't control his powers because the bear beast is taking over him. This would make his character more interesting and battles would be faf less predictable. Have him lose here and there and have someone close to him die because of his underestimation of an enemy. Maybe this death will change him a little and make him less cocky. Maybe he'll think twice before pissing off a powerful enemy. Think like that and try to put in character development. The best characters are the ones that you delve into and show their gradual development cycle throughout the series.