Talk:General Ironeye/@comment-70.88.69.82-20150119162429

You want tragedies here and there. You need some hoom in each chapter that makes the audience want to keep reading. Another idea I have is he can't control his bear power and he kills someone innocent. Maybe this will change him and make him think twice about the bear form. I'm thinking a concept like Spider-Man's symbiote suit. It increases his strength, but turns him into an asshole.